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Monday, March 24, 2008

Six Sentences: New Fallen Snow

It’s simple. Just write six sentences. Say anything you like.

A snowflake fell past the window, softly, like a teardrop. Beyond her dark silhouette, reflected on the window, the motel room was quiet. The man on the bed, silent, like the snow. Only the good die young; she could expect to live a very long time. Outside the snow flew past the window, faster, becoming a blizzard. She picked up her coat and left, a fire breathing dragon disappearing into the snow.

7 comments:

Gemma Wiseman said...

This is lovely!

Describing so much with so little!

So many extra narratives spill away in peripheral visions.

Gemma

Laura Brown said...

Thank you. Different for me. I usually write the opposite way. Giving all the information and less of the imagery.

Robert McEvily said...

The format suits you Laura! Great piece!

Lucia said...

Very cool! What could it mean?

She got into her car and lit a long slender cigarette. The butt burning bright red as she took a drag in. She blew the blue/grey smoke into the night air as she rolled down the window of her BMW A340, snow flakes trying to make their escape inside. Her camera by her side, it had been a long night of picture taking. The scene secured for the for her by Forensics. Who could have done this to this man?

Laura Brown said...

L Lady (aka RockerChick) that is excellent. We could make our own six sentence story with those two characters. :) I love that you wrote that, thank you.

I'm not really sure what character I wrote was doing. I had written her as a hit woman at one point but changed my mind. The abused woman has been done so much in fiction I didn't want to go there either. Maybe she's the sister of the abused woman.

There was a girl/ woman grabbed right on the street where I work yesterday evening. Just heard about it as I was leaving work tonight. Made me think about all of that again.

Lucia said...

Yes, we need a strong woman for this role. She could be someone who is abused and gets satisfaction in taking crime scene pictures to help the law catch these unlawful creatures in society. Her contribution to helping victims of crime, even when they are deceased. We should give her a strong name "KATE WINSLOW or something...Rachel Levy or no name at all...mysteriouso!

Laura Brown said...

Two strong women even. One the cat burgler or whatever she is and the other the detective on the case.